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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think that it is essential to learn. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #history #waste #time
In recent times, the debate regarding the importance of studying
history
 has gained increasing importance. While there are many who argue that its study is a waste of time, in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is one of the most important subjects taught in school.
Firstly
, it can be useful to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 the point of few of those who think it is not important.
In
contrast of
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contrast, of
 other subjects,
such
 as informatics or science in general, it can be argued that it does not have a direct application to the real world. As an example, after having studied how to program a computer, a student may able to develop new things, and
also gain
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also gains
has also gained
 the skills needed to have a job, whereas a
history
 course does not contain any notion that enables to create new things.
On the other hand
, the main point of studying the facts that
lie
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lied
 in the past is
definitely
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defined
 to prevent past errors
to happen
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happening
 again in the present and in the future. In fact, the dynamics between countries are in some way recurrent, and through the study of the events happened and their resolution it is possible to save time, military efforts and
also
 human
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
.
Moreover
, it is nearly impossible to be part of the political scene without a deep knowledge of our past, and since the most widespread government system is a democracy, the reason why studying
history
 is important is obvious. In conclusion, despite the fact most of the people are of the opinion that the study of
history
 is nearly useless, I firmly believe it is one of the basic subjects that must be
teach
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taught
 everywhere, without any exception.

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