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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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It is essential that children are able to differentiate between doing right and wrong early in life,
punishment
 is vital in assisting them to learn the differences
.
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.
 In my opinion, I strongly agree that
punishment
 as a consequence of disobedience is necessary because
this
 serves as of form of deterrence as well as installing fear of being punished.
However
, punishing by correctional
method
 ought to be used by parents and tutors to teach positive ways of behaving.
Firstly
, I totally believe that
youngster
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youngsters
the youngster
 should be punished in order to be able to distinguish between correct and incorrect things because
this
 will serve as a
method
 of
deterent
something immaterial that interferes with or delays action or progress
deterrent
 to them.
In other words
, they would know there are
repurcusions
a remote or indirect consequence of some action
repercussions
 for their actions,
this
 would likely prompt them to act rightly.
For example
, school children in Lagos were banned from observing their
mid-term
the middle of the gestation period
midterm
 breaks in 2018 as a
punishment
 for disobeying the school rules and regulations.
Consequently
, making use of corporal
punishment
such
 as; beating, giving
assignment
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the assignment
an assignment
assignments
, and banning
fromhaving play times have been
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from were playing times
from were play times
from were played times
from having play times have been
 a distinctive way of correcting the younger ones.
However
, corrective
punishment
 should be made use of by father's and mother's as well teachers to
incalcate
teach and impress by frequent repetitions or admonitions
inculcate
 fantastic morals
into
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in
 children.
This
 is because a child is more likely to imitate
actions
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the actions
 and inactions of people around them easily, so be using
this
method
 they would be able to learn quickly and
apprioprately
in an appropriate manner
appropriately
 the best of behaviours through
this
. So, allowing older people to teach
this measures
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these measures
this measure
 will be an effective means of
eduacting
give an education to
educating
 the young wards.
For Instance
, a report by the Teacher's association of Niger state in 2019, stated that kids that were punished through correctional means are more expressive and outspoken
then
 those that were beaten when they acted wrongly.
Thus
,
this
method
 should be used more often
by
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in
 the
elderly to
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elderly, to
 efficiently correct the youngsters. In conclusion, I believe that corporal
punishment
 is an important
correctional
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corrective
correction
method
 for children to distinguish
proper and improper behaviour
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the proper and improper behaviour
 because
this
 will deter them from
repetiting
the act of doing or performing again
repeating
such
 behaviour and make them conscious of the consequences of their actions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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