Even though doctors all over world agreed that fast food is bad for people health more and more people are eating it.why are more people eating fast food. What can be done about the problem.

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Dietary habits

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The dietary habits

of people have changed drastically over time.Overtime healthy tradition

food

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cousines

the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared

cuisines

cushions

cousins

have been replaced by fatty and easy accessible fast

food

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items. Why people are opting

this

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unhealthy eating habits and what should be done to alleviate the problem caused is discussed in

ensuing paragraphs

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the ensuing paragraphs

To begin

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with, most people of modern society possess busy lifestyle

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A school goer or a professional all

faces

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face

competitive environment and finds it very hard to take out time for cooking at

home

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, people

are generally opting

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have generally opted

for quick and easy

food

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options and fast

food

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like pizzas, burgers

etcetera

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qualifies as easy

food

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items and

thus

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out of necessity

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the common people generally

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Masses

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are feeding on unhealthy quick

food

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items.

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this

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people

finds

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find

the

food

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served

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pizza and hamburger

food

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courts to be more appealing

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then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

home

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cooked

food

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. As

such

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, let a family or an

official

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office

gathering tasty fast

foods

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food

items fits into every occasion and to

everybodies

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taste.

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, due to all above mentioned reasons people are becoming

found

having or displaying warmth or affection

fond

of quick unhealthy

food

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items.

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, in order to control bad dietary habits of individuals

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awareness about

importance

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the importance

of healthy

food

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habits, is a must.

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can be achieved with the help of parents at

home

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level and teachers at academic level. From a very young age individuals must be tough about, how a disease free life can be achieved by developing balanced and healthy dietary habits.

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government

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the government

governments

should take help of sports celebrities

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movie starts and other elite personalities

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who are role model for many to educate youngsters on

voluntary basis

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a voluntary basis

about

bad effects

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the bad effects

of fast

food

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products

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By following aforementioned steps a target of healthy world can be achieved easily. In conclusion, people feed on fast foods due to their easy accessibility and better taste than

home

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cooked

food

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, the ill effects of these foods containing bad fat can be controlled with awareness among individuals at family

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school level and by taking help of elite personalities

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Even though doctors all over world agreed that fast food is bad for people health more and more people are eating it.why are more people eating fast food. What can be done about the problem.

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