we cannot help everyone in the world that needs helps, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The writer’s view, there is a hot debate over helping to the everybody that needs it
run
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to run
the
world
.
However
, I disagree with the idea that we should help them at any price.
for
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For
this
purpose, there are different ways.
Firstly
, it is clearly fanciful that we can help all the needy people in run the
world
.
Forthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, every country or everybody
face
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faces
the more problems.
Moreover
, In most countries the issue of deficit the budget is
important abstacle
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an important obstacle
important obstacle
important obstacles
to aim for giving opportunities to people for a better life with more amenities.
In addition
, should the governments or everybody helps to other people in the
world
, It would be hard to attend their people, and it could be causing problems
such
as
destitude
poor enough to need help from others
destitute
, jobless and so on.
Secondly
, for helping to the people who are
need
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needing
it, there are
diffrenet
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
ways that
does not necessarily need
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do not necessarily need
government or persons. In
actually
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actuality
, if they tend to help the other people, they would help to to them by own expense.
In addition
, for
this
purpose, international and regional institutions and organization were created.
For example
,
red cross
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the red cross
or red crescent
have helped
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has helped
the needed people in
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the people needed to
the needed people to
run the
world
. Especially, the people have suffered
by
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from
war or natural disasters. In conclusion, the best
way to help to
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way to help
every body
all people
everybody
who have suffered
by
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from
war or natural disasters or more needed people, use
thed
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the d
mechanisms of international or regional institutions, and either individually or voluntarily, nor
govermental
relating to or dealing with the affairs or structure of government or politics or the state
governmental
aids in every country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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