the two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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First

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The first

show examples

one is just

including

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includes

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a few trees and an unuseful beach.

This

island

's west to east measure is approximately 250 meters. The

second

map of

this

island

shows us that

this

island

can make a more interesting place which with

Correct article usage

the construct

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construct

Replace the word

construction

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some

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of some

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buildings

This

construction finalised

that

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apply

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a restaurant located north of the

island

and a reception building down the restaurant.

Furthermore

, some accommodation

buildings

located

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are located

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west and east

side

Fix the agreement mistake

sides

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of the

island

. A pier here south of the

island

which people can connect the

island

. After that people can use a vehicle track to reach reception and restaurant

buildings

Also

, a footpath made for people can connect accommodation

buildings

and to the beach. Those maps show us an

island

's changing

Change preposition

from an

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empty

island

touristy

Correct article usage

a touristy

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island

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, buildings with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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3 paragraphs

128 words

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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