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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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The accessibility of the World Wide Web, as well as the volume of data one can receive without charge, makes it a necessity to most people around the world.
Although
 there are many benefits of
this
 medium
such
 as ease of online educational programmes and solutions to daily problems,
however
,
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,
the drawbacks cannot be overlooked.
Firstly
,
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,
one major merit of the internet is the convenience of education it gives. Presently, several individuals, who
as a result
 of the pressure of work find it extremely difficult to attend physical classes for an additional degree, can do so via the computer during their free time.
For instance
, I could not register and complete a Masters in Business Administration for nine years in combination with my job at the
bank but
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bank, but
 today,
this
 has been accomplished, only because of the internet.
In addition
, details are passed on with the speed of light from any part of the
earth
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earth, hence
hence
, making it fast and easy to get answers to mind boggling questions. A
first
 time mother
for example
, may have so many concerns about
stages
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the stages
 with her
new born
recently born
newborn
 and can get them quelled by experiences from fellow
caregivers
 globally.
On the other hand
, the Web accumulates lots of information that may not be
accurate thereby
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accurate, thereby
 misinforming anyone who logs on to that site. The fact that people can post whatever they think
on
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of
in
 the virtual space without censorship tells a lot about the free and easy to access information we sometimes get.
Also
, publications
such
 as books that have been painstakingly written and published, get uploaded and circulated without recourse to the authors.
This
 happens
as a result
 of the lack of checks inherent in the cyber space.
Consequently
, though it may be data to some at no charge, it is a huge loss to others. In conclusion, despite the numerous advantages the World Wide Web avails us, the attendant challenges
such
 as misinformation and plagiarism need to be considered as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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