The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.
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The two pie charts draw the conclusion
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a survey of
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' and
girls
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' cultural and leisure activities.
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, equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music, but a dramatically larger number of
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liked reading. There were
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many differences in terms of the children's preferred sports. Turning to the first
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, we can observe that
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prefer playing computer games (34% participation rate)
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taking other activities. Playing basketball comes as the
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most popular leisure,
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by almost a
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of male children. Basketball is followed by soccer, which is exercised by 17%. Skateboarding and listening to music are less preferable activities, chosen by 11% and 10% of
boys
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respectively. Reading, the least popular cultural activity among
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,
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represents only two
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. Taking a closer look at the
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chart
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, we can see that
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' most preferred activity is dancing, being 27% of the total.
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to the
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' preferences, reading is chosen by more than a fifth of all
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of female children who play computer games is roughly twice less than that of
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(16%),
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activity is
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third
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most popular on the
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'
chart
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. With a slight difference between computer games and netball, the latter is
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at
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a 15
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% rate.
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to skateboarding
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among
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, 11% of
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go in for gymnastics. Listening to music comes as the least popular leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the first
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, third".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie graph/chart
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • engage in
  • contrast
  • significantly
  • minimally
  • gender differences
  • equal participation
  • synthesize
  • trends
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • unexpected
  • popular/unpopular
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