With development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem

These days adolescent are more attracted towards
internet
surfing and social media
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to make new friends and relations.But some
time excess of
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time in excess of
these kind of activities
could be lead
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could lead
to risky situations.There are several ways in which
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we can control that
activities
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activity
to protect youngsters from unseen
danger
. To solve
internet
danger
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government
and parents should take some sensible steps in order to save youngsters.
Firstly from
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Firstly, from
government
contribution
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they need to organise some
internet
awareness plan in schools and colleges
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in which they provide I formation about
advantages
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the advantages
and
disadvantages disadvantages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
of surfing.
Thus
to
insure
make certain of
ensure
there
of them or themselves
their
maximum safety.
Secondly
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government
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the government
should have rights to asses the data and accounts of youngsters
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so that if any inappropriate activity will be point so
government
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the government
must take any action to
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lessen the intensity of; temper; hold in restraint; hold or keep within limits
curb
it. Apart from the
government
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parents
also
play an important role in protecting their wards from
internet
dangers.
First
of all
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it is vital for parents to keep close eye on
children
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children's
activities on
internet
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the internet
.
In addition
to that
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they should save some parental lock on some unsafe social sites
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which could put youngsters in
danger
.
Moreover proper
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Moreover, proper
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
should be given to children
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to follow
right path
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the right path
. In conclusion
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it is true that due to
increase
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increased
usage of
internet
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the internet
and social media
amongs
in division, with shares to each
amongst
among
youngsters
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can
resulted
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result
in any kind of
danger
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However
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it can be
stoped
(of a nose) blocked
stopped
by taking certain measures by
government
and parents.
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