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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve a crime.Do you agree or disagree?

Criminal activity is becoming virus
for
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in
of
 the world. With the advent of the
technology
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, some people believe that
criminal
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crime
 rate can be reduced.
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, I agree with the proposition as it would not only prevent from crimes but
also
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 solve it.
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 with, it could be thought that hi-tech
technology
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 has been used in every
aspects
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aspect
 of
area
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the area
an area
 which helps in reducing the
crime
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. To illustrate more, previously criminals could change their identity easily and commit more crimes.
This
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 activity is
declined
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declining
 as the facial
recognisation
the state or quality of being recognized or acknowledged
recognition
 has been introduced by the Google. A recent study,
for instance
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, revealed that in the past decades the chances of
crime
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 happening due to change of personal identity
has fallen
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have fallen
 by 20%.
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,
technology
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 is preventing the
crime
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 from happening.
Furthermore
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, according to me, an advancement in the
technology
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also
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 solves many crimes at
first
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 place from
occuring
come to pass
occurring
.
Firstly
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, sensors and security alarms played crucial
rule
the actions and activities assigned to or required or expected of a person or group
role
 in stopping
crime
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 to be
occured
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occurring
occurred
 at home or bank.
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, heat sensors
has been installed
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have been installed
 in the modern houses for security purposes.
Secondly
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, online
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crime
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criminal
 record of the criminal is shared on the online portal
easily so
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easily, so
 that police can catch them frequently.
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, some algorithms are developed for
security
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the security
 of the governmental data from the hackers too. To conclude,
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from
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for
 the past decades the rate of
crime
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 has been decreased due to
technology
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 advancement, which is preventing and solving the
crime
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. I believe that advanced
technology
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 decline the
crime
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 rate by
devolping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
 the face
recognisation
the state or quality of being recognized or acknowledged
recognition
 and solve it by introducing sensors and algorithms.\

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance systems
  • CCTV cameras
  • forensic technology
  • crime scene analysis
  • conviction rates
  • data analytics
  • predictive policing
  • high-risk areas
  • cybersecurity measures
  • cybercrime
  • sensitive information
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • emergencies
  • law enforcement response
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