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-Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle this problem?

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It is certainly true that many students are getting more involved in playing digital games than sports. In my opinion,
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 is because of easy access to computers and
lesser
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
 facilities for sports activities.
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, a few solutions can be implemented to tackle
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 issue. The fact that fewer students take part in sports activities and more in computer games stems from a number of reasons. The prime reason is that these days computers and mobiles have become economical and are easily accessible.
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, these electronic gadgets come with different gaming options that are specifically designed to be addictive in nature.
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, these days parents tend to have a busier lifestyle due to which they have less control over the activities of their children.
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, the lack of outdoor sports facilities worsens
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 situation even more. One possible solution to encourage students to engage in sports activities is to make sports a compulsory subject in schools.
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, more and more children will start developing an interest in physical sports.
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, the authority can allocate funds for the construction of sports grounds and making it easier for students to have access to these facilities.
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, parents can use parental control software in order to limit the amount of time that their children can spend on playing games on computers. In conclusion, to draw students towards playing sports and reducing their interest in video games, the opening of outdoor sports facilities, incorporating sports in
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the curriculum
 and
use
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the use
 of parental control applications
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 the most effective solutions. If these mentioned solutions are
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 the number of children taking part in physical activities would soon rise.

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