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Nowadays, the multiple kinds of crime rate were rising compared to the last two decades ago in almost all countries. The essay will examine the main causes of increasing misconduct and possible solutions of this problem.

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In the world, people relied more on technology, which increases the
crime
 rate over the past few decades significantly. There are certain reasons of rising of
crime
 attack due to technological enhancement.
Although
, some possible solution to avoid the problems and declines the
crime
 rates. Recent development in technologies changes the world incredibly, but there are certain problems which has
also
 emerged in terms of
crime
. According to the survey taken place, almost every country faces the same problem which is
cyber
 crimes.
Moreover
, in the growing fields of technologies, which enhances the human lives but in other hand, some humans mishandles the technology by breaching the confidential data of the other people which is
also
 known as
cyber
 crimes. Due to digitization, each and every detail has been digitized of every individual. So, is possible for some individual to get hands on the information by breaking into the server.
Furthermore
, governments of many countries implemented some solutions regarding the
cyber
 crimes. As there is tremendous increment in
cyber
 crimes the administration of the nation has come up with a certain workable solution. To reduce the amount of
crime
 executives has developed certain fields known as '
Cyber
 Security Cell' which monitors the illegal activities taken place with the peoples.
Also
, authorities have implemented few laws regarding the crimes.
In addition
 to that, peoples awareness program has been initiated regarding the
cyber
 crimes.
Furthermore
, bank and government have been working on increasing security related to their server so that anyone cannot get hands on the information of the other person. These are some of the possible solutions to avoid the problem related to
cyber
 crimes. According to me, the
crime
 rate rises highly due to the development of the technologies nowadays as compared to a few decades before as there was just a beginning to the technologies and most of the individuals were not familiar with it.
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