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Nowadays families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Migration for work is a popular trend. While some people argue that it has a bad impact on children, others,
however
, think that it is a positive development. I believe that people migrate for better future prospects and it is beneficial for their children. On the one hand, people migrate to foreign nations because they want to provide a better life for their family and children. Most of these people migrate from underdeveloped countries to developed nations.
This
 is because most of these developed countries provide free
education
 and medical services to families. To illustrate
further
, Canada provides free medical care and
education
 to its people.
Furthermore
, once youngsters complete their
education
 they have much better job opportunities than they could have in their home country.
As a result
, youngsters feel more secure and satisfied.
On the other hand
, others believe that migrating to a new country has a negative impact on children. To start with, they may find it harder to adjust to a new culture. Youngsters need time and friends to adjust to a new society and when they do not find friends, they feel isolated and many of them become the victim of depression.
Moreover
, a foreign
language
 is another hurdle that they face. Many families who migrate from Asian countries to Europe are not fluent in a local
language
 like English. Due to
this
, children feel insecure when they try to mingle with locals.
For instance
, according to a survey by Hindustan Times, 40 percent of Indian Punjabi youth finds themselves isolated In Ontario, Canada because they do not have good command over the English
language
. To conclude,
although
initially
, youngsters find it difficult to adjust to a new culture once they learn the local
language
 and start mingling with locals as they find themselves in a much more secure position due to various facilities like better
education
 and free medical services along with better job opportunities in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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