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5.D. Some People believe that travelling alone really benefits in learning a country’s culture and experience, while others believe that it is better to travel with someone you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Traveling
Suggestion
Travelling
 is considered as one of the greatest ways to learn about different cultures and traditions around the world. Some people believe that it will be beneficial to
travel
 with
someone
 that to
travel
 alone. Though there are some positive benefits of
travel
 alone, I believe that travelling with
known person
Suggestion
a known person
 or in a
group
 is much more enjoyable. On the
on
used of a single unit or thing; not two or more
one
 hand, when
someone
 travels alone, he can enjoy some benefits.
Firstly
, decision making process becomes faster, as a
tourist
 taking all
decision
Suggestion
decisions
 alone. There will be on one to provide
extra opinion
Suggestion
an extra opinion
extra opinions
 to take
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 consideration.
For example
, when deciding which foods to eat, may be delayed because of taking an opinion of
someone
 providing company in the trip.
Secondly
, socializing with local people becomes much easier when travels alone. To illustrate, when people
travel
 in a
group
, there will be less scope to do something outside the
group
.
In contrast
,
travel
 alone provides enough time to a
tourist
 to mix with local people
to know
Suggestion
know
 about cultures and traditions.
Traveling
Suggestion
Travelling
 alone has some positive aspects for the tourists.
On the other hand
, in spite of having some positive impacts of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 alone, a
tourist
 can avail more benefits when
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 in a
group
 or with
someone
.
Firstly
, when a person travels with
someone
, he can enjoy the trip more.
This
 is because, travelling in a
group
 makes
overall cost
Suggestion
the overall cost
 lower and provides opportunity to enjoy more with less cost.
Secondly
,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 involves a burden of responsibilities, which can be equally shared among the teammates while
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 in a
group
.
As a result
,
tourist
 can get more freedom and time to socialize with locals.
Besides
, a
tourist
 can be safe and feel more
secured
Suggestion
secure
 while
travel
 with a close person.
Therefore
, it is evident that
travel
 with
someone
 is more beneficial. To conclude,
although
 there
has
Suggestion
have
 some positive benefits of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 alone, a
tourist
 can enjoy at fullest without concerning about security while
travel
Suggestion
travelling
 with a
group
.
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