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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Chemical usage in the production and
preservation
 of
food
 has been a great concern for some individuals. In my opinion, while there are some benefits of
this
, the drawbacks
such
 as the effect on the
health
 of consumers and the
food
 loosing its nutritional value cannot be ignored. Admittedly, one of the major benefits of
food
preservation
 is longer shelf life. Which simply implies that the
food
 is still consumable after six months to a year.
In addition
, it is
also
 cost effective for the producers of the product as they can estimate their budget for the year.
For example
, the manufacturers of baked beans, put the expiring date of six months on their products.
Nevertheless
, one of the major drawbacks of chemical
preservation
 in
food
 is, it is harmful to the
health
 of the consumers. Most of the chemicals used in preserving
food
 for a long while have been noted to be harmful to the
health
 of the consumers. Some of these chemicals have been associated with causing deadly diseases
such
 as liver failure and cancer that has killed a lot of individuals.
For instance
, a research by Boston university showed that 50% of the
food
that is
 consumed in the United States are chemically grown and has resulted in deteriorating
health
 of her citizens.
In addition
, chemically laden
food
 is observed to have lost its original nutritional value as compared to the freshly grown produce. To conclude, while a longer shelf life of a product is one of the benefits of
food
preservation
, the demerits
such
 as the
health
 of the consumers and the nutritional value of fresh produce cannot be overemphasized.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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