We often hear that new technology presents a threat to our traditions. In what ways however can new technology help maintain our traditions?

It is certainly true that according to the technology development, a plethora of traditions can be
threated
subjected to a physical (or chemical) treatment or action or agent
treated
trusted
threaded
. While I agree with
this
idea, I tend to believe that new technologies can help us with keeping our traditions. There are several reasons to support my idea.
First
, due to the current availability of high speed internet, everybody is able to search for the rout of the
tradition
. All people are able to find how custom is shaped in the annals of history.
Therefore
, the
tradition
would be meaningful for people and they would have
more enthusiastic
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more enthusiasm
for keeping that custom.
Second
, people are able to find
unmeaningful
parts of a
tradition
and they can reform it. If there would be any ignorance in a
tradition
, people can easily omit that part and do the other parts of a
tradition
. In my opinion, in
this
way, the custom would be reinforced and would be able to survive during the heavy cultural changes. On top of that, nowadays everyone shares their photos or videos on Instagram, Facebook or other
types social media
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social media types
. A
tradition
can be
mutual and common issue
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a mutual and common issue
between
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among
all users to post their pictures or clips about a
tradition
.
For instance
, in my country everybody shares their moments in the New Year and post their photos while celebrating it. The mentioned
tradition
’s name is Nowrouz
and I
Accept comma addition
and, I
think, Nowrouz have become more powerful in recent years via Facebook and Instagram. All in all,
however
the technology can harm our traditions, it can help us to keep them and even make them more common.
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