Some people say the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal on public places. Other people say that this is not enough and other measures are needed. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion.

Today more
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Today, more
than ever the health problems are becoming extremely urgent. There is no secret that smoking, as
on
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to
the most popular bad
habbits
an established custom
habits
, causes a number of diseases
such
as
lungs
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lung
cance
any malignant growth or tumor caused by abnormal and uncontrolled cell division; it may spread to other parts of the body through the lymphatic system or the blood stream
cancer
, heart attacks and others. As
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
have been struggling with
this
issue for many years, the problem solution question remains: how to make people give it up? Some claim that it is necessary to ban smoking in public places will be
effective
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effectively
measure
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measured
,
where as
on the other hand
whereas
the others reckon that only
this
can be
unsuficient
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
. Making smoking restricted in public places
such
as parks, bus stations, pubs, restaurants
seems
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seem
to be reasonable to reduce
quantaty
how much there is or how many there are of something that you can quantify
quantity
of smokers
thus
this
harmful habit will not be popularised among the other people and, eventually, may lead to
dicreasing
becoming less or smaller
decreasing
the number of potential smokers.
Moreover breaking
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Moreover, breaking
the ban would lead to a penalty fine that would complicate the situation and must
undoubtly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
discourage the smoker to use
cigaretts
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarettes
. But will it stop the person who is obviously addicted to keep smoke? It is very dubious. The addicted one will smoke in his/her place or anywhere else but in public places.
Thus
, the other measures should be taken upon that. In my humble opinion, the following measures might be helpful: increasing the price
on
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of
cigaretts
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarettes
,
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,
promoting more anti-smoking advertisings, and organizing anti-smoking
compagns
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
campaign
campaigners
. In
such
a case, the smoking person might start changing his/her way of thinking concerning the problem mentioned above and
finally
quit smoking.
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