Some people say the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal on public places. Other people say that this is not enough and other measures are needed. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion.

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than ever the health problems are becoming extremely urgent. There is no secret that smoking, as

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the most popular bad

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an established custom

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, causes a number of diseases

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lungs

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lung

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any malignant growth or tumor caused by abnormal and uncontrolled cell division; it may spread to other parts of the body through the lymphatic system or the blood stream

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, heart attacks and others. As

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the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

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issue for many years, the problem solution question remains: how to make people give it up? Some claim that it is necessary to ban smoking in public places will be

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the others reckon that only

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can be

unsuficient

of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement

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. Making smoking restricted in public places

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as parks, bus stations, pubs, restaurants

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to be reasonable to reduce

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of smokers

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harmful habit will not be popularised among the other people and, eventually, may lead to

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the ban would lead to a penalty fine that would complicate the situation and must

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discourage the smoker to use

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finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking

cigarettes

. But will it stop the person who is obviously addicted to keep smoke? It is very dubious. The addicted one will smoke in his/her place or anywhere else but in public places.

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, the other measures should be taken upon that. In my humble opinion, the following measures might be helpful: increasing the price

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cigaretts

finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking

cigarettes

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promoting more anti-smoking advertisings, and organizing anti-smoking

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. In

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a case, the smoking person might start changing his/her way of thinking concerning the problem mentioned above and

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quit smoking.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Some people say the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal on public places. Other people say that this is not enough and other measures are needed. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Individual greed and selfishness have been the basis of modern society. Some people think that we must return to older more traditional values such as respect for the and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people judge success solely by money and material possessions. however, success can be achieved or measured in other ways. What are your opinion about this subject?

Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming more popular. Some feels this is a positive trend ,while others don't. what's your opinion?

In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?