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People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #workforce
For me, I don’t agree with
this
 statement for some reasons below
First
 of all, retired people will feel lonely when staying at home because their children are at work. So staying in the workforce will give them
effective way
Suggestion
an effective way
effective ways
 to away from
lonliness
the state of being alone in solitary isolation
loneliness
 Staying at home not only makes them feel
boring but
Accept comma addition
boring, but
also waste of time
Suggestion
also a waste of time
. Going to work will give them
right way
Suggestion
the right way
 to develop medical fitness or just having
good time
Suggestion
a good time
 with their colleagues rather than staying at home doing housework or watching TV
Lastly
, people remaining in
workforce
Suggestion
the workforce
a workforce
 can contribute to the economy of the country. Having experienced, they can solve problem clearly.
Consequently
, remaining in the workforce is the right
thing but
Accept comma addition
thing, but
 we can’t make anyone totally agree with us. Their choice will base on medical health or taking care of their
grandchilren
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • financial resources
  • retirement fund
  • cognitive functions
  • social interaction
  • wealth of experience
  • expertise
  • social security systems
  • dependency ratio
  • employers
  • adapt workplaces
  • job retraining
  • flexible working hours
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