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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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There is an increased use of chemicals, to produce and preserve
food
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. In my opinion, I think the disadvantages far outweighs the benefits of reduced
cost
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 of production, and longevity of foods. One of the main advantages of using chemicals to process
and and
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 store
food
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, is the reduction in
cost
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 of production. In some countries where there is no government support, the agricultural sector is able to cut down on
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 production
cost
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. Another benefit is the longevity of
food
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 crops. There
are
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is
 some
food
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 that
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, have a short life span, these
preservatives
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 help to ensure they can stay longer.
Also
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, it helps Farmers, prevent destruction, owing to pests and insects.
This
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 is very beneficial to countries, where there are high cases of farmland infestation.
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, allowing chemicals and
preservatives
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 to be used on crops and
food
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, has serious consequences.
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, there is a possibility of contracting diseases, and release of toxins into the body. Seeing, there is no way to determine the extent, to which each consumer will react to the chemicals.
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, the
preservatives
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 and chemicals could be one of the many causes of cancer in the world.
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, the effects of these chemicals could lead to an increase in the
cost
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 of importation. In conclusion, regardless of the benefits, the drawbacks of using chemicals and
preservatives
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 can be devastating, due to the increase in toxins and diseases, which will result in high cases of death.
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