Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

Nowadays, additives are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
included in foodstuffs when producing them. While there are merits
for
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of
this
action, the demerits in my opinion, which include diseases and often times death cannot be negotiated. Admittedly, including enhancers to food during manufacturing, helps to improve their qualitative properties.
In other words
, some food
have
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has
unpleasant taste
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an unpleasant taste
, odour and
appearances but
Accept comma addition
appearances, but
these can all be masked only by adding sweeteners, flavours and dyes respectively. Undoubtedly, manufacturers will lose if all these properties are not considered during the production of their food products.
For instance
, the customer service department of
Cabdury Nig Plc
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the Cabdury Nig Plc
, reported that their clients complained about the awful taste and
look
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the look
of the products, so they had
th
definite article
the
introduce additives to these goods.
Thereafter
, their sales improved drastically because the rate of acceptance of these products
also
increased.
Nevertheless
, the usage of these chemicals
have been found
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has been found
to be a threat to the health of the citizens. Suffice to say that, so many diseases these days are attributed to the consumption of these substances.
In addition
, diseased conditions
such
as allergic reactions, respiratory distress, heart attack, high blood pressure and ultimately death have been recorded to have emanated from the presence of these chemicals in the consumers' body system.
For example
, there was an outbreak of Psoriasis in 2017 in Sokoto in people who consumed a particular oil that had dye added to it in order to improve its appearance. In fact, 20% of them died after a week of consumption. In conclusion,
although
, adding additives during manufacturing of foods is advantageous because it conceals undesirable properties like bitterness, bad odour and in turn improves
economy
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the economy
, the major disadvantage in my belief, which is fatal cannot be compared.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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