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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

#people #house #apartment
From centuries people used to live in different buildings. Nowadays the most popular are houses and apartments. I truly believe that living in a
house
 has more advantages than disadvantages. Living in a
house
 you can
really feel
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really, feel
 free.
This
 is because of
huge space
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the huge space
 around you. Probably the most important advantage of
having in a
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having a house
house
 is its bigger living area. It is not a problem usually to have 3 or 4 bedrooms.
Additionally in
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Additionally, in
 most cases there is a backyard where you can organize a BBQ. Own garage is a
next
 plus. Living in an
apartment
 often there is not too much space. Apartments with 4 bedrooms are quite rare and very expensive. In
this
 case you have to forget about
BBQ
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the BBQ
. Sometimes going outside is like a trip. And, what is very important, every month there is a fee to pay for living there. Bigger
apartment
 means bigger costs. So it is not profitable to live in a big one; in
such
 case it is better to choose a
house
, especially when you have a big family. I used to live in a
house
 with my parents. Available huge space is a big advantage of houses. Now I live in a small
apartment
 in Warsaw and I clearly see the differences. The area of my flat is not huge. Every month I have to pay a rent.
Moreover every
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Moreover, every
 day I am forced to listen my
neighbors'
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neighbours'
neighbours
 quarrels. And I cannot change them. At least I can change an
apartment
. To sum up, I am sure I give a lot of reasons why living in a
house
 is better than living in an
apartment
. Good luck for looking your own place to live.
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