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A country’s future depends on its young people. Therefore, a country should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The advancement of a
country
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 in the years to come is thought to be dependent on whether its youths are greatly invested in or not. As it is a widely-known fact that
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 category of people forms a bulk of the productive population, it is
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 agreed that they should be heavily invested in.
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 essay will show how
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 decision benefits a
country
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 by
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 the advantages of improved economy and
healthcare
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health care
 delivery.
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, focusing considerably on the youths of a nation helps to improve the economy of
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 nation because these youths are in their most innovative years and constitute a vast majority of the working population. To illustrate, in 2014, the Nigerian government, started up the unemployed Nigerian youths on small to medium scale businesses which was geared towards empowering them. Economic statistics later that year revealed that taxes paid by these young business owners produced a
two-fold
twice as great or many
twofold
tenfold
 rise in the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) of Nigeria which would have been impossible if the government had not taken the initiative to employ these young people.
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, it is clear that a
country
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 should invest immensely in its youth to boost its economic value.
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, the
healthcare
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health care
 system is an integral aspect of a
country
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 which can be boosted by investing greatly in the
education
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 of the youths.
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, the United States in 2004 enacted a free medical
education
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 law for young people in the US which spurred more youths in the
country
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 to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in medical
education
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,
thus
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 increasing the number of medical practitioners practicing in the
country
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 four years later.
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 rise in the number of doctors translated
to
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into
 improved
healthcare
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health care
 services which would have not been feasible if medical
education
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 was not made free for all. As
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 example shows, there are clear benefits to a nation’s medical
services
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service
 if youths are considered To conclude, the factors of
improved economy
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an improved economy
 and health services have sufficiently proven that a
country
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 should invest significantly in its young people. It is hoped that more countries of the world will consider taking up
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 challenge.

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