In the opinion of some people, the internet has narrowed the gap among people in the world by increasing social interactions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In
this
modern world, technology is advancing day by day.
Internet
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The internet
is
also
one
such
invention of
technology which
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technology, which
has become the most powerful tool in the world today as it is drawing the people closer. With the help of the
internet
, the way people used to socialise with each other has changed and improved to a much greater extent.
To begin
with,
internet
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the internet
has brought various benefits to the people letting them to socialise more. It has provided excellent social media platforms
such
as Facebook, Twitter and others which have just revolutionised the way people used to communicate in the earlier times.
Moreover
, sending messages using
internet
has become easier, convenient and economical.
Otherwise
, people had to wait a lot for sending or receiving messages.
For example
, people nowadays can send instant messages on Facebook in just no time.
On the other hand
, there are several drawbacks of using the
internet
and its effect on social interaction. One of the drawbacks is that people do not interact face to face.
Hence
, social interaction has been limited to online communication.
In addition
to
this
, people have become addicted to the
internet
to
this
much extent that they suffer from health related problems
such
as poor
eye-sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
, back ache and others.
For instance
, it has been found that people often use
internet
devices, being as comfortable as possible, lying on the bed which affects their body posture causing back ache. Conclusively, it can be said that though
internet
has benefitted the mankind in several aspects
by
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of
reducing the distance
among
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between
people but
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people, but
it has
also
led to the birth of new problems related to health and others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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