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Today, it is very common to have people from two different generations mix in the same workplace. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this situation?

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It is irrefutable to say that nowadays, different kinds of
generation
 are working together in the same workplace.
Thus
, there are some advantages and disadvantages to
this
 scenario. I would like to discuss the following points. All groups of ages people work in an office. Some are near to retirement and some are freshers.
Although
, They are working together. They are some advantages
such
 as learning from each other. The old
generation
 tries to teach about how business works. Apart from that, they
also
 share about things and problems faced at freshers age. The most important to teach about success in life. Where as new
generation
 teach about how to use technology in a profit and smart way.
Therefore
, by the collaboration of the both generations the workplace or office become more useful. Another advantage, the merging of different generational thinking make a creative product or innovation. On the other, some people believe that
generation
 difference creates problems in the workplace.
Firstly
, different thinking may cause in the business. I mean to say that new the
generation
 has some opinion which conflicts with old
generation
 which produce an unhealthy environment in the office.
Secondly
, dressing sense, the dressing of the new
generation
 is totally different from the older
generation
. Especially for women or ladies. Which makes old
generation
 people uncomfortable. So,
this
 scenario initiates many problems. So, It
also
 has some disadvantages.
Thus
, there is more advantage than disadvantages as mentioned in the above paragraphs. There
is
Suggestion
are
 more good reasons
of
Suggestion
to
 work with
generation
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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