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Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it.

#cities #congestion #rood #traffic
The most problematic issues in
metropolis
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the metropolis
is related
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are related
 to
traffic
 congestion. Why is
this
 happening, and, tackling what procedure can assist? As
matter
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a matter
 of fact,
over population
too much population
overpopulation
 in big cities which it
have had
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has had
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
 on
megacities
.
This
 root out because of some factors which prominently includes miss management and
immigration
therefore
, finding a way to facing with
immigration
 mainly can relieve
traffic
 issues in
long term
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the long term
. At
first side
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first, side
, allocate appropriate resources in terms of
distribute
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distributing
distributed
 facilities throughout all cities of the country lead to
decreasing ratio
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a decreasing ratio
 of
immigration which
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immigration, which
 dramatically making
balance
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the balance
 between installation and population in
megacities
. Regarding to
this
 fact, adaptation of city opportunities versus the population is more achievable.
On the other hand
, inappropriate infrastructure of a big city was considered as another reason to struggling with
traffic
.
Accordingly
, tackling
a way
from a particular thing or place or position
away
 in order to improving the city infrastructure definitely assist to
reducing
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reduce
 those problems.
For instance
, form transportation point of view, improvisation of transportation lines help to
reducing
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reduce
traffic
. Meanwhile, determination of relevant laws
such
 as preventing of using personal cars in peak hours, which can be occurred two or three times in a day, tackling congestions
,
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,
and vanish traffics perfectly. In a while, developing of public transportation
are facilitate
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facilitates
this
 matter.
Traffic
 congestion, these days can be managed well through control the ratio of
immigration
 to metropolises, and develop the
transportations
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transportation
 facilities.

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