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Most people prefer ready to eat food rather than homemade food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages.

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The modern lifestyle and hectic schedules are encouraging more and more people to consume ready to eat
food
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. In my opinion, it is a negative trend because
readymade
made for purchase and immediate use
ready-made
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 lacks nutrition and its regular
consumption
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 will lead to various health problems. Everybody is busy these days. In most families now both parents
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are working
 and neither has time to cook proper meals at home.
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Ready-made
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 that can be bought from stores is hugely popular with these people because it helps them save time.
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, in some cases, packaged meals are less expensive than regular homemade meals. Better still, they are available in a variety of tastes and flavours. All of these factors encourage the
consumption
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 ready to eat meals. Unfortunately, convenience is the only advantage of ready to eat meals. Regular
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 of
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ready made
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 leads to various health problems in people. They contain high levels of preservatives and additives that can cause various diseases like cancer and kidney trouble.
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, fast
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 is full of calories and deficient in nutrients. If it is consumed on a regular basis, it will lead to obesity, diabetes and heart trouble. It is
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 addictive and makes people want to consume it again and again. Children are the worst affected by fast
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consumption
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. During their developmental stage, they need a lot of
nutrition which
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nutrition, which
 only home cooked meals can provide. Needless to say, kids who subsist on a diet of fast
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 tend to have developmental issues. They may
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 suffer from behavioural issues because the high sugar and energy content of junk
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 can make them restless and hyperactive. To conclude, after analysing the situation, it is not hard to see that there are more disadvantages than advantages to the
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 of fast
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.
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Ready-made
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 certainly makes our lives more comfortable by eliminating the need to cook. Unfortunately, it
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 makes us unhealthy by depriving us of essential nutrients.

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