It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

It is argued that in some parts of the world,
number
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the number
a number
of elderly people would skyrocket in
compare
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comparison
to youngsters in
future
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the future
which might bring out some detrimental consequences.
On
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For
an
economical
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economic
perspective, it is obvious that there would be more people of retirement who are eligible to receive a pension. Since being not able to work, they would not contribute to improve
government
revenue. The proportion of young adults who can contribute to
government economy
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government, economy
through taxes,
therefor
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
, would be smaller.
In other words
, less young adults work, less tax revenue will be provided for
government
. Healthcare demand of older people often would rise;
this
leads to devoting some
government
budget to these citizen
fellow
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fellows
, and greater taxes for
young employee
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young employees
a young employee
to compensate
this
budget shortage. Having higher proportion of elderly people would influence negatively on
social aspect
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the social aspect
social aspects
of a country. The elderly residents are not as motivated and
energetic
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energized
as adults, so they might experience a sedentary lifestyle. They often not able to adapt to diversities happened in
modern technology world
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the modern technology world
;
this
could sometimes render monotonous
society
where people are
demotivate
, and do not
effort
be able to spare or give up
afford
to develop their
society
.
Moreover
, some careers, take some jobs related to agriculture or
mining which
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mining, which
entail some physical activities as examples; would diminish because older people seems unlikely can do these demanding jobs. It,
hence
, causes just some careers be done in
society
regardless of age. In conclusion, I believe we lose more from increasing older population who could deteriorate economic and social prospect of a
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • mentorship
  • strain
  • public healthcare systems
  • pension schemes
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • automation
  • consumption patterns
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • sustainable living
  • environmental conservation
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