It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. Is it a positive or negative development?

It is claimed that the proportion of
aged
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age
aging
people will be more than young people in near future.Personally, I feel that it has a number of positive consequences.I am going to explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, In the
first
place, it will be a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
expansion
for
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of
the companies and society.
elderly
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Elderly
people are more experienced compared to
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
.In
this
case, there will be more practiced individuals in the
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
market
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market, thus
thus
, companies are
enable
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enabled
to take advantage from their experience due to making more money. In the
second
place, it can be useful for
government
.
if
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If
elders will be more than youngsters,
government
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the government
wont
will not
won't
have to create much equipments for young individuals
such
as schools or job opportunities.
Thus
, governments will be capable of
save
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saving
the budget for more important works.
On the other hand
, it will be has a negative
outcomes
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outcome
for society and people.
Firstly
, due to some statements if the proportion of
old
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older
people will get more than
jouveniles
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juvenile
, companies and firms will
faced
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face
with the shortage of young workforce.Young people have more power and faster than the elders so they are highly likely to increase
the the
definite article
the
income of their firms.
Secondly
, elders are
need
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needed
drugs and medical cares
thus
,
government
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the government
requires to obtain
this
necessity.So, it can cause huge charge for
state
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the state
to create hospitals or special places for aged people. .
Finally
, in my way of thinking, the
government
budget
should be spend
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should spend
should be spent
on other vital things including building schools.Not only should it spend on building schools, but it
also
is a good idea to spend it for
educational system
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the educational system
an educational system
to have well-trained children for
future
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the future
. In conclusion, due to both above mentioned perspectives, it seems to me that it is a harmful development to have elders more than
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
.
Lack
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The lack
of young individuals in every country can
has
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have
negative drawbacks for that country
instead
of getting an old country.
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