Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It's argued that all states must have medical facilities but the new treatments
not
available because it's very expensive. The essay completely Add a missing verb
are not
agree
with about statement because of the benefits of free medical camps, Change the verb form
agrees
moreover
the consultation and equipment Add a comma
moreover,
is
costly. The essay first will look at the benefits of a camp and Change the verb form
are
then
discuss about
the treatment and why it is expensive. First of all, I believe that every province to provide a free medical facility is a significant way to predict issues. It's a good approach to Remove the preposition
apply
overcome
Wrong verb form
overcoming
health related
Add a hyphen
health-related
challenges
and make
Wrong verb form
making
people
like
healthy. Change preposition
apply
However
, poor people
daily facing
diagnosis Wrong verb form
face
challenges
even
Rephrase
daily even
they
don't know how to become healthy. Correct word choice
though they
For instance
, a few countries like India and
Correct word choice
apply
also
provide free health checkups and providing
health insurance policies Verb problem
apply
in
Canada and Change preposition
apply
UK
has free medical for all diseases and diagnosis. Correct article usage
the UK
Secondly
, Nowadays the
technology is gradually emerging, but provinces are in below poverty Correct article usage
apply
due to
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
resource
problems. Fix the agreement mistake
resources
Due to
this
the state governments not
able to provide all facilities for all treatments. Add a missing verb
are not
Although
, sometime
need to go Replace the word
sometimes
other
countries for Change preposition
to other
the
treatment Correct article usage
apply
but
it's Correct word choice
apply
overburden
on Wrong verb form
overburdening
people
and government. For example
, recently one of the news channel
conducted Change to a plural noun
channels
survey
and released an article. It's mentioned a few countries facing financial Add an article
a survey
the survey
challenges
due to
this
not able
Add a missing verb
being able
provide
medical fully. Fix the infinitive
to provide
To conclude
, despite the financial circumstances government provide
medicals but not fully. If Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
government
overcome the Correct article usage
the government
challenges
and provide
medical fully it will be helpful for all poor and middle-class Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
people
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- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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