The government should allocate more funds to teaching science rather than other subjects for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

In school life,
sport
is categorized
in
Suggestion
by
school subjects as basic circumstance so some people think that
sport
is necessary for students while another group believe subjects could determine by students. Following in both of views, I agree all those views and I will give my reasons in the essay below. On the one hand, Group of people
agree
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agrees
about
Sport
is
important part
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the important part
an important part
as school subject
First
reason is
sport
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a sport
can bring a well-being health for all pupils,
For instance
,
Weekly
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the Weekly sport class
a Weekly sport class
Weekly sport classes
sport
class can get pupils with basic exercise in order that can improve their mental and physical
healthy
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health
.
Second
,
Sport
let
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lets
students feel
relaxation
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relaxed
as well as
outdoor
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an outdoor sport
sport
help
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helps
to decrease their
stresses
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stress
from studying
inside
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in
the class.
Finally
,
Sport
teach
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teaches
children about
teamwork process
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the teamwork process
as football team
show
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shows
how members support each other in
pressure situation
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pressure situations
a pressure situation
.
On the other hand
, Others disagree with forcing students play sports. Some children prefer non-action activities
such
as Math, Science, Art. Because of their personalities and lifestyle not being sporty and
also
have
not
referring to the degree to which a certain quality is present
no
interest with it
making
Suggestion
makes
is making
them waste their time to do other stuffs that useful for studying.
For example
, exam preparation, practice drawing.
Moreover
, Student should choose
subject
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a subject
the subject
subjects
by
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of
their own decision, which related to their appropriate aptitude so that student will surely find themselves in right major interest and match with occupation they want to be in
future
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the future
. For my idea, I agree with both
side
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sides
because all discussion are still
benefits whether
Accept comma addition
benefits, whether
student who sporty or nerdy habit.
one
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One
side
sport
give
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gives
their
strongly
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strong
mind and good body
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
and other side, they can decide what subject they have interesting.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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