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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that the change is always a good thing. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.

#people #lives #change
Many people spend their lives working and earning money. When you ask someone how many companies you worked
in
Suggestion
with
, some people will say
`
denotes a person or thing
this
this
 is my
first
 company that I have
worked`
activity directed toward making or doing something
worked
 even if they are adults. Because, some of them think
change
 is very difficult and challenging.
In contrast
 rest are very brave and risk taker. They do not afraid of changing anything in their lives. In my opinion,
change
 always gives us some experience and a chance to adapt new things.
Firstly
, all experience
are come
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is coming
is come
has come
comes
 from changing. They can
change
 their jobs, their
country
, their boyfriends/girlfriends or hobbies. If they are used to do something, it is so hard to
change
 it. Even though they love their jobs, they can
change
 it. Because other
company
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companies
 give them better benefits and compensation. In spite of having better proposal, they can avoid
change
. I think
this
types
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type
 of people have
less self-confident
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less self-confidence
, so they feel scary of changing lives.
Secondly
, changing gives us to learn new things. If they
change
 their
country
, they have an opportunity to get into different cultures and people.
This
 is very exciting that you live in another
country
. Because nobody can do that.
For example
, I
have just resign
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have just resigned
 my job and moved to
United states
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the United states
 to improve my English. I have great experience here. I am so happy that I changed my
country
 for a while. In conclusion, when people are fed up doing
same things
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the same things
, they should try to
change
 their lives. I am sure it won`t be worse than now.
Change
 always contributes some valuable things
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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