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Some people believe that government should not spend too much money on space exploration . Do you agree or Disagree ?

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I totally agree
to
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with
 the opinion that very expensive
space
research
 programs
are straining
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is straining
government's budget
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the government's budget
, jeopardizing essential more prominent issues like employment,
healthcare
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health care
 and basic education which impact majority of the population in developing countries. Many developing nations still have people living below
poverty line
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the poverty line
 are are deprived of the basic necessities like food
,
Accept space
,
 shelter
,
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,
 education and hygiene. Myriads of people lack basic primary education which eventually leads to
lack
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a lack
 of the employment. Bureaucrats should allocate more funds in generating employment which will eventually reduce the crime rates
.
Accept space
.
 Health campaigns and creating awareness about health issues demands more attention
.
Accept space
.
only
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Only
 a handful of people are able to utilize the medical facilities
,
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,
 government should spend more on medical
research
 programs to make it economical and accessible
for
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to
masses
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the masses
. One more area which demand attention is infrastructure
.
Accept space
.
 Government should work in building infrastructure in order to boost
economical
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economic
 growth
.
Accept space
.
Thus
, in
such
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 condition
space
research
 programs looks like
luxury
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a luxury
.
Accept space
.
 Now a days every country in the world is conducting
space
research
 programs to understand the planets and in search of life beyond earth. I understand the requirement of
the the
definite article
the
space
research
 and its significance as well
.
Accept space
.
 Without performing
such
research
 we would not have come to know about Global warming, Ozone layer depletion, change in temperature of the atmosphere which is increasing at an alarming rate
.
Accept space
.
 As we are aware of it now we take corrective measures to control the damage. To recapitulate, conducting
space
research
 programs
are
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is
 significant for the countries
,
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,
However
, Authorities should give paramount importance to the basic needs of the citizens
.
Accept space
.

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