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At present the media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development?

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In
contemporary world
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the contemporary world
, mass media like television, radio, newspaper and internet has a massive influence on people and for sure society.
This
 essay discusses the impact of media on
mankind
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mankind's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and thought and whether it’s a positive or negative effect.
there
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There
 is no dough that media affects the
way
 people think and how they develop their own opinion and thoughts.
Firstly
, it’s a great
way
 of communication between people all over the world. They can now contact anyone at any place. They can
also
 be updated with recent global issues.
some
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Some
 argue that media affects people negatively. They believe that media industry operators may provide false information about
certain event
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certain events
a certain event
 and draw
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
 thoughts toward their own intentions.
For example
, the case where Facebook moderator was accused
for
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of
 being involved in directing the United Sates of America’s citizens thought in
presidential election
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the presidential election
a presidential election
presidential elections
.
Although
 it may be true, but the presence of a variety of media resources nowadays made it easy for people to investigate true information from fake ones.
on
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On
 the other hand, we cannot neglect the role of media in our lives. It acts as a bridge between governments and citizens.
For example
, people may not get the chance to meet the president or prime minister, but if they regularly watch
news
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the news
 or read newspapers, they can easily know about them and their vision. Media
also
 can be informative and educational where people sharing the same interest can freely communicate with each other via several platforms like Facebook groups or even e-mails. To conclude, as mentioned in
this
 essay, media has a tremendous influence on people’s mind and perspective. It can direct our beliefs and the
way
 we think in a positive
way
 but we have to be smart and investigate true information from fake ones.

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