Question: Many working people get little or no exercise during the workday or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem ?

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People
Suggestion
A people
belonging to the working class sector of the economy rarely
exercise
during the weekdays and
also
during their leisure
time
which poses a great danger and leads to a series of health problems.
People
Suggestion
A people
belonging to
this
class to not get enough
exercise
due to their
work
schedule. They are to resume by 8am and close by 4:30pm but they do not get to leave the office till late
sometimes depending
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sometimes, depending
on the
work
load they have to deliver so there is hardly enough
time
to
exercise
. All they just want to do is get home, sleep and prepare for the
next
working day which is a continuous phenomenon. Another reason working people do not get enough
exercise
during the week or leisure
time
is because some are lazy and are not willing to put in the extra
work
of exercising. Keeping fit and healthy is a job on
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
own by having to visit the gym after the close of
work
and sticking to a regular set of workout routines or deciding to wake up earlier than usual and dedicate the
time
to
exercising
Suggestion
exercise
. Employers should play a vital role in helping their staff keep
fit but
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fit, but
enrolling them
at
Suggestion
in
a
gym preferably
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gym, preferably
close to home so there will be no excuse of distance. Employers should
also
dedicate
exercise
times during
work
hours, in the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
and ensure participation by all members of staff.
Exercise
does not have to be rigorous, a simple walk around the office after sitting for at least 30minutes should be recommended. With the increasing rate of health issues due to little or no
exercise according
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exercise, according
a recent survey by the Medical Practitioners Association in 2019. Working class people should take their health in their hands and motivate themselves to exercising at least three times a week.

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