Now a days many children play outdoor games. Some People said that they play indoors games. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In modern
era many
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era, many
teenager
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teenagers
play games out of door like football and cricket.
However many
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However, many
individual think that they play
game
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games
inside
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in
the
home I
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home, I
disagree that children play indoors games on mobile or computer On the
hand I
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hand, I
think they play games out of
door
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a door
doors
in the big gardens to become physically fit
.
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.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
helps them to become active toward whole day work
.
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.
For instance
a study taken by health club who told that 99percent
ch
of outdoor games help them to become physically and mentally fit

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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