Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children in the past. Do you agree or disagree

A common concern nowadays is how modern lifestyles can have a negative effect on family
life
. A particular worry is that parents no longer are able to provide sufficient care and support to their children. My own view is that
this
is generally true
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but not always so. On the one hand, busy parent`s lifestyles have some adverse effects on children`s upbringing. While traditionally the husband was the breadwinner of the family and the wife stayed at home to take care of her children,
this
ordinary family role now has completely changed. Nowadays, women go outside to work side by side with men, leaving her children alone or with nannies. As
result
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a result
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,
parents spend less time with their children,
for example
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,
they
are no longer eat
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are no longer eating
are no longer eaten
have no longer eaten
no longer eat
meals together as used in the past.
Also
working parents tend to have less opportunity to supervise and watch their children`s behaviour
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On the other hand
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many hard working families may still find the time to spend with their children. These families put more value on raising children
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and it
cause
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causes
them
agreat
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a great
sense of achievement when they bring up their children in a perfect way.
For example
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in some low income families, parents are still considerably involved in their children`s
life
so they know their children`s friends. From my own experience
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
grew up in
family
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families
a family
where both parents are
full time worker
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full time workers
a full time worker
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but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
barely remember a day where
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
hadn`t saw
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haven`t seen
didn`t see
did not see
have not seen
wasn`t seeing
was not seeing
one of my parents
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,
and they
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
always available for us when we need them. In conclusion,
although
the busy lifestyle has resulted in a situation where families are less close than before
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
believe that there are cases where parents extremely busy but still managed to be involved in their children`s
life
. It should be the parent duty to balance their working and family
life particularly
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life, particularly
if they decided to have children
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