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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
There is a controversy among the topic of personal role towards the surrounding medium. While many advocates contend that citizens are helpless in developing their communities
,
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,
it seems to me that they have a key part regarding
such
 development. People have a remarkable impact on their
environment
.
Firstly
, they could rationalize the utilisation of pollutants and contaminants
for example
, avoid using pesticides and insecticides and use the old and traditional ways
such
 as yeast to get rid of insects.
Secondly
, finding alternatives of plastic pages, which became a very critical issue that should be addressed as soon as possible because it represents a non-biodegradable and sustainable pollutants. Implying that it's lifespan could
lasts
Suggestion
last
 for millions of years, and replace it by organic paper bags that can be decomposed easily.
Finally citizens
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Finally, citizens
 are to use distinct approaches to maintain their
environment
 Clear
in other words
, they need to avoid utilizing disposal items and replace them with long lasting items
consequently
, the ratio of litter will be significantly plummeted. Government and large companies
also
 could help by implementing and financing novel
environmental
Suggestion
environmentally
 friendly procedures.
This
 means that, applying new strategies that focus mainly on the favour of the
environment
.
For instance
, manufacturing organic fertilizers as opposed to chemical fertilizers.
Moreover
, release verdicts and apply sentences to deter people to contaminate water or throw garbage in the streets via paying
fins
money extracted as a penalty
fines
 or spending prison
times
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times, hence
hence
, all individuals will think many times before polluting their
environment
. In conclusion,
although
 some critics argue that society members are disabled to help their
environment
 and make it a better place to live in, personally, I am convinced that individuals do have a serious influence on the surroundings.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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