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Nowadays almost people love to travel and more and more people are travelling. .

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Nowadays almost people love to
travel
 and more and more people are travelling. In
this
 essay, I am going to share my opinion about the main reasons about
this
 phenomenon and explain the benefits of travelling. In my view, one of
reasons
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the reasons
 why almost people love to go
travel
 is they have more free time than before. Today with the supporting of many machines and technology almost
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
laborious
 only have to work 40 – 48 hours per week and they have at least 12 days off. Another reason is it is
more easier
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easier
easiest
 to go
travel
 than many years ago. Many tourism services are opened to help people to go
travel
 to
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
 they love to with reasonable prices. Even people want to
travel
 by themselves, there are many transportation and accommodation services that provide most
travel
 needs. About the benefits of travelling, one of the great values when
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 is people have new experiences. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
 is very important because if people do not have any new experience for
along
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a long
 time they may get bored and lost their inspiration which lead to decrease work performance. That’s one of
reasons
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the reasons
 almost companies often operate free company trip annually. Another benefit is people have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to relax, to stay away from works help people regenerate energy
effectively
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effective
. People often get
stress
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stressed
 because of problems that they still do not have solutions. When they keep thinking about solutions they getting stuck with problems. In my experiences, when I go
travel
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travelling
 and
do not thinking
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don't think
do not think
haven't thought
have not thought
 anything about problems suddenly solutions appear.
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