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Some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough to learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that educational system dedicated much
time
 to theoretical lessons compared with practical trainings. In my opinion,
this
 is
right idea
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the right idea
 and
this
 system needs to be reformed. I agree that students have to spend most of their educational
time
 just on studying
lessons
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the lessons
. The
first
 reason is that, a glance at
education
 curriculums in schools and universities shows that a sizable
time
 of these programs are theories and practical trainings have just a small portion. I remember, when I was a teenager, I had to learn many lessons
such
 as mathematics and physics in class and there were not any practical
education
 for them. So for
most part
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the most part
 of our
studying
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study
 we just kept in mind complicated formulas without using them in our daily life or ever having information about what they can be used in life. One the other hand, young people have to work as an apprentice after obtaining qualifications. It reveals that their knowledge can not meet the expectations of work market. When a new graduated person is in search of finding a job in their major will cope with questions about their
practical
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practice
 skills.
This
 is a serious barrier to find a decent job.
Therefore
, lacking of sufficient applicable experiences completely is clear. To sum up, I think we can observe that students in all grades of
education
 are forced to spend much
time
 of their
education
 to learn factual information. In the other
words they
Accept comma addition
words, they
 have not educated enough for their
futur
the time yet to come
future
 life and work.

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