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As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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In early
era there
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era, there
 was a
belive
any cognitive content held as true
belief
 that family that stays
together grows
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together, grows
 together
,
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,
IN today’s modern trend people believe in
nucelar family
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the nuclear family
nuclear family
 as the cost of living is compelled to shrink. Nuclear family is
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for economic purpose where it believes less no of children helps in better parental attention and is able to give good educational opportunities and
also
 lowers the level
os
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OS
os'
 stress. Due to having only a
child
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child's
parents
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parent
 become
over protective
overly protective
overprotective
 and imposes restrictions on the
child which
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child, which
 makes it difficult for the
child
 to socialize with people and explore the outer world
,
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,
which could be a reason to develop
unexpectable
 behaviour like being
stuborn
tenaciously unwilling or marked by tenacious unwillingness to yield
stubborn
, undisciplined, over pampered and attention seekers
,
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,
the psychological
cobdition
a state at a particular time
condition
 of the
child
 is affected and the importance of family and family values are not known to the
child
.
Therefore living
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Therefore, living
 in a small family can be more
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for economic
purpose regarless
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purpose, regardless
purpose regardless
this
 trend is likely to continue as countries around
tge
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the
 world develops and become wealthier.

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