The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that technological improvements aid in the prevention and resolution of criminal activities, which lead to a drastic reduction in crime rate. In my opinion, I agree that the use of technology is key to minimizing levels of crime.

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, I believe that it eases people to commit crime. Technology

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as CCTV systems and facial recognition by artificial intelligence, which provides surveillance on the streets and easily detect wanted criminals.

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, a potential breach of the law can be prevented and detain dangerous criminals that possess weapons,

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, guns and knives.

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, if people are aware of being monitored, not only they will obey the laws but to stay away from unlawful activities.

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, installing speed cameras along the highways has curtailed traffic crimes dramatically in Malaysia.

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, technology advancement introduces modern crimes

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as cyber scamming and hacking computer-based systems. These illegal activities often involve mobile phone and computer.

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, scammer calling the parents requesting for a big sum of money to save their children from kidnapping, human trafficking or illnesses, when their children are not with them.

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, online hackers can steal and sell personal information of a person to the

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party without permission by just sitting in front of a computer. There are online hackers hack charity websites to fraud Samaritan’s money. In conclusion,

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, the use of technology causes the appearance of cybercrimes, there is a significant reduction in crimes as modern crimes are easily tackled because today’s people are smarter and knowledgeable.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

258 words

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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Computer and AI are being increasingly being used for online education. Can AI enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

Many museums charge for admission while orthers are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extend is this a positive or negative trend?

Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and give your opinion