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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people are of the opinion that, to mitigate the ever-increasing
demand
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 of conventional fuels
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 as oil and gas, undiscovered areas should be made accessible to extract more resources. In my opinion, allowing access to more resources will not solve the issue of increasing
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 in oil and gas.
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, to prevent a global
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 crisis, we can regulate the amount of fuels being consumed by the nations until alternate
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 sources are discovered.
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, providing access to more resources does not guarantee a decrease in the global
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. In fact, it has been noticed time and again, the more these
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demand
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demands
 have been met, the more they increase.
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, we have witnessed incidents where, once the resources have been made accessible for the companies, there has been a sudden change in the ecosystems of that particular area, owing to the huge drilling operations that offset the wildlife and biological balance in that particular area. I believe, the only way to meet these ever-increasing demands
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 to introduce some alternate forms of energy,
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 as solar and wind, that do not require oils and gases.
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, we must meet the
currrent
a flow of electricity through a conductor
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 demands without putting the more wildlifes into jeopardy, and
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 that, we must start regulating the consumption of conventional fuels by the nations to give us
enought
as much as necessary
enough
 time to implement the alternate energy sources. In conclusion, allowing access to more resources is not a viable option to meet the
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 demands. It is the duty of the individual governments to
impelemt
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implant
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 stricter laws and regulations and, at the same time, place more focus on alternate sources of energy to meet the
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 demands.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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