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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money Addressing problems of public To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Government nowadays are becoming more interested to investigate what is happening in other planets rather than
helping
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helps
 public to overcome their everyday problems. Some people think it is of no use investing
money
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 in other planets
instead
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 of that government can spend
money
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 on solving
public’s
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public
 issues and I completely agree
to
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with
this
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 point. People
in
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on
this
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 planet are more stressed because of their daily messes in life,
for example
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, traffics on
road
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the road
. Due to
this
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 reason they are not able to reach their office on
time
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 which causes them stress. In
this
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 case
government
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the government
 can spend
money
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 on new transportation facilities by building metro rails or express trains.
As a result
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, people can always reach their offices on
time
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 and they will be before
time
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 for their work.
Likewise
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,
Government
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the Government
 who
invest
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invests
money
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 on other planets to search for more information is of no use.
For instance
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,
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,
there are only few people who live
in
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on
 other planets.
Although
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 they are scientists who are always in search to discover new things it is not worth to spend huge amount of
money
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 in them.
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on
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On
 the other
hand investing
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hand, investing
large amount
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a large amount
large amounts
 of
money
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 is absolutely
waste
serving no useful purpose; having no excuse for being
wasted
vast
. That
money
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 can be spent on public by providing free education to poor children and supplying water facilities in
villages
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the villages
. To conclude the essay, I totally agree to
this
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 point that,
government
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the government
 is wasting their
time
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 and
money
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 by giving it to other planets.
Rather they
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Rather, they
 can provide
money
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 to the rural areas so that they can live a stress-free life.

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