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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays, a lot of
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 are choosing extreme destinations like the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic.
Such
 locations offer both adventures as well as risky experience for the tourists. People who travel to
such
 locations want to explore life. Places
such
 as these tend to offer extreme climates, you have to be mentally and physically fit to be able to visit them. These places show you an altogether different side of the world which is not what most of us are used to. Thinking of witnessing the nature - flora, and fauna of those places
first
 hand gives you
goosebumps
Suggestion
goose bumps
 and makes your adrenaline go high. Visiting these places makes you mentally tough and helps build the patience that one requires. Generally, solo
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
 who is young between the age group 22-35 go to these places or retired couples. Someone who can manage his choirs can travel solo else you need someone to be there with you. There
is
Suggestion
are
 a lot of risks involved in
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to these places since the temperature varies considerably, so your body needs to adapt to
such
 an environment quickly else you might risk your life visiting
such
 places. Once I got a chance to visit the Sahara Desert, wherein I was a part of group 10 people. In a group, each member handles something or the other so you kind of feel safe
otherwise
 it can become life-threatening if you are
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 alone or you don't know how the weather will behave. In the end, I would say by
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to extreme places like these you learn a lot of basic things
such
 as
team activity
Suggestion
a team activity
, patience,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 which can be applied in normal life.

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