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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend.

#friend #advice #college #job
Dear Soha, I received your letter and I learned that you are in a dilemma as to whether you should find a job or join college. I’d suggest that you
work
 for at least a year before you pursue your higher education buddy! As you have always wanted to be an entrepreneur without gaining hands-on
experience
 in the field of business administration, continuing with
studies
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 will not be a good idea. Needless to say, you’ll never enjoy theoretical courses in an institution, unless you
experience
 the practical business world. Getting professional
work
experience
 at
this
 moment is a great idea. To start with, you will develop crucial interpersonal skills and a significant social network. That means choosing to
work
 will be beneficial for your social and personal life and I am saying
this
 from my own
experience
. As you know, I chose to continue my studies right after high school and regretted the boring routine almost every day. I’d like you to
work
 either in a contact
center
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 or as a
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salesperson
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sales person
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. These professions will not only polish your communication skills but
also
 boost your confidence. I wish you good luck in your future
endeavors
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! Best wishes, Sam
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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