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Science tell us which activities are good for our health and which ones are bad for us. Despite knowing this, millions of people still do activities which are bad for them.Why is this the case and what can be done to change it?

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In the recent times, there has been a huge advancement in the area of science which has helped us know about healthy and unhealthy habits.
However
, a lot of people ignore the health warning and continue to engage in unhealthy activities.In my essay I will talk about the causes of
this
 behaviour and
then
 will highlight, the steps which should be taken to improve it. There are various unhealthy activities that people continue to engage in.Nowadays, people live a busy lifestyle and have lack of time.
This
 is one of the main reasons why, people have started eating junk food as,
this
 saves them time involved in cooking a meal.
Furthermore
, most of the people live a sedentary lifestyle. A number of people do not do any physical activity and their intake of junk food is
also
 high.
Therefore
,
this
 leads to various health problems
such
 as obesity, high cholesterol etc.
In addition
, in order to cope with the pressure of work life, a number of people get addicted to tobacco, drugs and alcohol, which are detrimental to their well-being. Due to the addiction, people have developed, they consume these products regularly, in spite of being aware of the adverse effects caused to their well-being. They become very habitual towards these products.
On the other hand
, government can take some measures, which can encourage healthy living among people. To start with, the government can levy higher taxes on junk food, tobacco and alcohol, which can reduce the consumption of these products.
Secondly
, the government can provide more education and
also
, conduct awareness programs on the adverse effects of consumption of these unhealthy products.
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