In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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in these days, people
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in urban areas either alone and in the nuclear family rather than
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tending
to live with joint family. In my opinion, I believe that
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will be led to the negative trend among the people, because of less parental
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and even lack of moral values and etiquette have seen in among the grandchildren. One negative consequence is being seen among the people who are living alone in major cities,
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lack of parental
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, people in these days might be suffered from various levels of
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youngster, who have less knowledge and experience about how they can able to cope their
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in
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fast pace era when the level of inflation is reaching at the highest place. At
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moment, they really need someone else who has much more experienced regarding these kinds of
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and stimulate them to tackle their
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as homesickness.
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, without parental
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, people are usually struggling these kinds of
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which may be
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addressed by living with parents. Another possible consequence is that, lack of moral values among the children who are living in the nuclear family far from their grandparents. To put it
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another way, people in these days are more money minded both parents are working now
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, they have less time to spend with their teenagers who often spending their most of
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playing aggressive video games and watching
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violent
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as WWE.
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may turn the children to become more aggressive and stubborn.
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, children have less etiquette and ethics because they are unable to get a chance learning these kinds of moral values from their grandparent while living in a nuclear family.
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the love and sense of security among their children because they are unable to acquire sufficient etiquettes and values in an earlier time, which they may be needed to become responsible citizens in adulthood. In conclusion, I think that it will absolutely lead the people to live in a negative way without having the
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of parents and living far from their joint family.
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