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Most people prefer ready to eat ready meals rather than homecooked food these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Many people choose fast meals rather than home prepared meals nowadays. On one hand, fast meals have some benefits like, limited
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 consumption, different cuisines and increased job opportunity. Fast meals have limited
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consumption which
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consumption, which
 will help to reduce the waiting
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 for consumers. At leisure, people would prefer to eat fast prepared meals than going for home prepared meals to maximise their free
time
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. Fortunately, many restaurants have Italian, African, Chinese cuisines which
offers
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offer
 variety of options to customers. Two weeks ago, a colleague celebrated her birthday
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with
 Sizzlers fast
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, a renowned restaurant in my community. The guests had lots of fun and it offered everyone various options of
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 to consume. It was a remarkable experience.
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, it is a tradition for many restaurants to employ workers to meet the demands of consumers.
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 has led to increased job opportunity for the unemployed in community.
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, fast
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 has its own pitfalls. Owing to the deleterious effects of its method of preservation
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of
 the human system and the high cost of production of fast
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. In preserving fast
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, the various chemicals used have been known to cause various types of cancers as proposed by
World Health Organizarion
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the World Health Organization
World Health Organization
 in the year 2000.
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 is a major
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the quality of being a hindrance
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 of fast prepared meal as it affects the human system
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over time
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, it is of no doubt that the cost of production is overwhelming
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 of the sophisticated machines and storage facilities needed for production and preservation. In most cases, many people will prefer to start up a restaurant by collaborating with other establishments to reduce expenses. In conclusion, in as much as there are drawbacks in fast
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, there are some benefits like limited
time
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 consumption, different cuisines and increased job opportunity.

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