In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion on this?

It is indeed true that rising population in numerous areas has made it necessary to expand the housing to
countryside
which is still untouched. Though it is
opinion
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the opinion
an opinion
of some that any
such
move is detrimental to
countryside
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the countryside
and should be averted. It is my opinion that until
rise
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a rise
the rise
in
population
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the population
goes unchecked,
concentration
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the concentration
of it in
select few cities
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a select few cities
overburdens the resources there and expanding the housing is unavoidable. The infrastructure in urban cities is crumbling due to the constant rise in humans living there. Some cities were established long before due to their geographical advantage or availability of resources
nearby but
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nearby, but
as time has gone by, these cities need expansion as the population have surpassed the amenities established for it.
For example
, as it is an urban
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
which provides ample growth opportunities, Mumbai has been seeing
influx
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an influx
of people for several decades now, due to which there is always
overcrowding
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overcrowded
in
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on
trains, home prices have skyrocketed and it has been a challenge to maintain the infrastructure.
Hence
, it is imperative that the boundaries of these cities are widened and people are housed in the
countryside
as well. As there is ample
space
present there and it would be beneficial that the housing
space
be broadened so as to lift the burden on
resources
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the resources
of a limited
space
. It is understandable that some believe that by doing
this
we would destroy the natural habitat and soon these places would
also
be
polluted but
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polluted, but
unfortunately, there is no other short term solution available.
Therefore
, there might be long term solutions
present but
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present, but
until these are implemented expansion is inevitable. So in conclusion, there may be valid concerns about the expansion of housing into the
countryside but
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countryside, but
until any long term plan is initiated it is incumbent upon us to ease the burden on certain cities and broaden the living
space
so as to better utilize the resources available to us.
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