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Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What is the factors contributing to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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It is obvious that a large number of individuals used
majority
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the majority
 of their adulthood
at
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in
 their office, while
work
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 pressure is an essential section of adult life. The element that promotes
work
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 achievement is high pay jobs, and
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 enthusiastic in
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job
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the job
a job
 is the anticipation of sense of wellbeing for all employees. One major aspect
that is
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 responsible for works fulfilment is astronomical salary.
This
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 is because when a worker received a
high
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higher
 pay he or she would be motivated and happy to
work
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 harder. Take
for example
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, an employee who works in a reputable company that pays enormous salary is always different from those that
work
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 in a small organisation in terms of
work
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 satisfaction.
As a result
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 of
this
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, those working in a big firm worked harder with motivation.
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, they appreciate their works with
huge amount
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a huge amount
 of salary.
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, the authentic excitement for
job
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 enjoyment is that workers have enthusiastic in their
job
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. The reason is that, employee would not mind the pay or gain
that is
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 on the
job
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, but they are interested in the
work
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 because of the pleasure they derived from it. Take
for instance
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, Adekoya, who is an actor, in his interview said that he derived happiness from acting, which has always made him the happiest person on earth.
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, workers should have
sence
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a sense
sense
 of wellbeing for
work
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. In conclusion, many people invest the important time of their life in working, jobs enjoyment is a crucial component of
employees life
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an employee's life
employee's life
the employee's life
employee life
.
Accept space
.
large
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Large
 pay is a factor that promotes
job
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 happiness while zealous is a
truthfull
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truth full
 suspense of
jobs
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job
 fulfilment for every employee.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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