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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Education is extremely important for everyone. It plays a vital role in every
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life
. But sometimes it is
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 crucial to spend some time in
extra curricular
outside the regular academic curriculum
extracurricular
 activities. It can be indoor or outdoor. Pupils should be given a choice about what they want to do. Even adults have different interests, so does the children have.
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, some like swimming, while others like golf, cricket, tennis, etc. Leisure activities should not be controlled by parents as
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 the time to relax mentally and physically for a child after their studies. One can learn various qualities from sports.
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, team building, negotiation, ‘never say die’ attitude. It
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 helps in improving social skills when you meet new people. All the skills help in later stages of life. People who restrict children’s leisure activities to be
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completed
 educational should avoid doing so It can hamper a child’s progress, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy”.
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, a proper balance must be made between education and other leisure activities. By involving a child in different activities
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 as drama, music, painting, meditation, yoga, one can make them
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undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
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 positive and happier.
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 will
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 help them in widening their career choices as they can
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 become artists. To put in a nutshell, children should be given freedom in choosing what they want to do in their free time. By
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 way, they can feel relaxed and gain energy for studying
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.
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, extra curricular activities help in defining the personality of an individual.
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